Oh, yay. This worked so well - Teyla's point of view, her feelings about her pregnancy and the loss of her people working into it all, the suspense and betrayal, her strength in the worst of circumstances. And the atmosphere was very clear to me - the planet on the outside, the disused darkness and old technology on the inside, tendrils on computers, all good.
Sheppard's mistrust of Teyla's instincts makes sense here, with most of the awkwardness coming from Teyla's emotion and annoyance.
I love that Rodney tried to write out the human genome and ended up on the walls.
I love Sheppard's and Teyla's conversation at the end. Not many people could sum up a traumatic (or any) event that way, giving it a theme and scope and a sense of connection to history, but Teyla can do it without sounding trite or preachy. You've captured her well.
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Date: 2008-09-20 09:18 pm (UTC)Sheppard's mistrust of Teyla's instincts makes sense here, with most of the awkwardness coming from Teyla's emotion and annoyance.
I love that Rodney tried to write out the human genome and ended up on the walls.
I love Sheppard's and Teyla's conversation at the end. Not many people could sum up a traumatic (or any) event that way, giving it a theme and scope and a sense of connection to history, but Teyla can do it without sounding trite or preachy. You've captured her well.
Also - Star Wars love. :)